80 Responses to "Hard Candy"
October 21, 2009 at 3:31 am
i loved it….i love readin things that makes my imagination go wild….wow
September 29, 2009 at 4:03 pm
It was great! It leaves alot to the imagination, but enough to keep you guessing ….Keep up the Good Work! 
September 24, 2009 at 11:57 pm
wow i love it but im not getting the end was it imaginary or did that really happen at the end
September 25, 2009 at 12:03 am
It’s just my imagination… The real end belongs to you…
Tell me what you want it to be.
Tell all of your friends that I want them to come and hang out with us too.
Auviour Angelic.
September 24, 2009 at 11:42 pm
It has all the makings of a basic novel. what I wanna see is a classic. not saying that it’s not good. But, I see the potential, so settle for better, Because it’s not your best.
September 24, 2009 at 11:57 pm
You are right Schawn Penn. Funny but true. These short stories have no part in novels…
That’s what I love about short stories…
They are just little tales for brief entertainment… I would love for you to read my novel… It is better than FANTASTIC….
Welcome and Stay… Angelic
September 24, 2009 at 11:32 pm
I Loved It !
September 24, 2009 at 11:58 pm
Thanks BossLadyShay.
Welcome and Stay…
Tell all of your friends to do the same…
Auviour Angelic.
September 24, 2009 at 11:29 pm
Awesome…where’s the rest?
September 24, 2009 at 11:59 pm
Hey Jay!
Well, the rest is up to you for now I must say. I want you to tell me what you think happened next…
Muah! Angelic
September 24, 2009 at 11:22 pm
mmm..interesing?
September 25, 2009 at 12:00 am
Yeah I know…
Interesting hahahahha
Welcome and Stay.
Angelic
September 24, 2009 at 11:21 pm
That was nice…I didn’t want it to end 
September 25, 2009 at 12:01 am
Awww ssSparkle,
Don’t go anywhere. I promise there will be more to come..
Welcome and Stay and Tell all of your friends to do the same.
Chow Angelic
September 24, 2009 at 11:10 pm
First point: awesome imagery
Second point: a little repetitve, I would fund other words/synonyms and metaphors to make it less redundant (for example instead of sayin “his eyes” all the time refer to his eyes by an anatomical part of the eye that the reader will recognize like the
pupil or cornea)
Third point: I don’t know if this is a clip from
something else or what…if not I would make readers wait a little tiney bit more then get to the sexual references…like set up the attraction a little more first
Fourth point: Love the dialogue at the beginning
Fifth point: Love the pillow fluffing part
September 24, 2009 at 11:53 pm
Why thank you Vandry,
I am always looking for pointers. It always helps me out. I will take into consideration what you are suggesting. I would also like to return the favor.
repetetive is spelled repetitive.
I would find (not fund)
sayin is spelled saying
tiney is spelled tiny.
I love reading all my post and always have a great time responding to them as well.
So, Vandry… Welcome and Stay and tell all of your friends to do the same… BTW I like the pillow fluffing part too. Muah!
Until next time Auviour, Angelic.
September 24, 2009 at 10:58 pm
Not a dull moment……
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September 24, 2009 at 3:19 am
awesome. Definitely kept my attention and had me wanting more.
September 21, 2009 at 3:31 pm
thAt was great for wat it was. Altough I felt like I got teased I emailed you so that I can hopefully get a copy of the book. GREAT JOB!
September 21, 2009 at 3:49 am
Wow this is amazing you had me from begging to end is this in print yet I would definately see myself reading this! Keep up the great work and good luck
September 20, 2009 at 5:04 pm
The storyline was good, but either I misread some sentences or there were a few lines that were incomplete sentences.
Examples:
“They were hard like grapes. Sweet and juicy.”
“Tried to see past my soft lips.”
Corrections:
“They were hard like grapes, sweet and juicy.”
“They tried to see past my soft lips.”
Keep doing your thing. Do it to the fullest!
–Ed Magik
September 20, 2009 at 7:31 am
Had me curious as to what happens next,so I liked it!!! Great use of detail also!!!
September 17, 2009 at 6:09 pm
Lovin this One. Let me know if have or going to have them in print. I know it would be a good read. I see myself cuddled up in front of my fireplace with a glass of wine, reading your work.
September 20, 2009 at 4:31 am
Hey Krystyle007,
Thanks for your comment! Yes these will be in print. I will not be posting all that will be published but I will be posting a lot. Probably about 2 or 3 per week. You have stay with me and everybody else here on this site. Send me an email at angelicartiaga@gmail.com and I will make sure you get a copy of the book.
Muah! Angelic.
September 16, 2009 at 12:07 am
WOW…THAT’S HOTT!!! I actually started to feel my temperature rise!!! Very nice, sexxy and classy!!! 2 thumbs up!!!!
September 16, 2009 at 12:07 am
I was all in to it…..thought it was about to go down on that elevator!!!!
September 15, 2009 at 10:14 pm
Very good, I enjoyed the short monologue. Thank you for sharing.
September 15, 2009 at 9:43 pm
wow…very descriptive and interesting…i want to read more!where’s the rest??? lol
September 15, 2009 at 2:06 pm
Hey Elysa… Thanks for your comment. Yes, I intentionally made this one a quickie! I’m happy you enjoyed it. I will be posting a couple of these per week. Make sure you tell all of your friends to come by. Tell them that I said welcome and stay…
Muah! Angelic.
September 15, 2009 at 5:23 am
Very nice touch.
Nicely done.
Great suspense.
September 15, 2009 at 2:05 pm
Thanks CED! I love that you enjoyed the nice touch and great suspense. Welcome and stay for more stories. Remember to tell all of your friends that you have a new spot to hang out and that they should do the same…
Chow.
Angelic
September 15, 2009 at 5:04 am
I likeyy. Ummmmm why da door had 2 open?
September 15, 2009 at 2:05 pm
Ha ha ha ha Swizzy917!
I know huh? That’s what I said! When I was writing this quickie and the door opened in my mind, I snapped my fingers and said, “Damn!” lol…
Welcome and stay for more okay Swizzy. This place is going to be a blast. Tell all of your friends to come by and play with us.
Auviour… Angelic
September 15, 2009 at 4:53 am
I am always down for very descriptive visuals….great job…
September 15, 2009 at 2:03 pm
Jergrif73,
I think I’m going to make descriptive is my middle name and visuals is my last now that you’ve said that. Thanks for the love and I look forward to seeing you here all of the time. Make sure you tell all of your friends to come and hang out with us.
Until later,
Auviour… Angelic
September 15, 2009 at 12:51 am
aw suki suki then lol. kudos
September 15, 2009 at 2:04 pm
Jazmine!
Aw suki suki… I like that… Can I have it? Lol. Welcome girl and stay. Make sure you tell all of your friends to come and play with us too! Aw sucki sucki… I love it!
Chow.
Angelic
September 14, 2009 at 11:51 pm
hahaha but the elevator door had opend . OH WOW!! KUDOS TO YOU
September 14, 2009 at 11:03 pm
I love that hard candy. Great story pls tweet when you post the next story
September 14, 2009 at 10:58 pm
DAMN! I came. good enough for me.
September 15, 2009 at 2:02 pm
Wowzers MrsAmeryca!
I love it! Read it again! Do it again! Welcome and stay. Make sure you tell all of your friends about your new hangout. Tell them to come and hang out too.
Chow.
Angelic
September 13, 2009 at 10:59 pm
love it…awesome description made me feel real…sexy and not too pornographic
September 13, 2009 at 10:06 pm
very nice, I felt like I was in the elevator watching! lol
September 13, 2009 at 9:58 pm
Thats good. What is this from? Really able to feel and visualize what is going on through your words…
September 13, 2009 at 9:37 pm
The action, planned and imagined was good, visual imagary, but come on , far too many descriptive words. Keep it simple keep it sweet. Debs
September 13, 2009 at 7:39 pm
Speechless, it was so visual. I had no sense of what was goin on around me while i was reading it. Keep up the good work.
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October 21, 2009 at 7:08 pm
wow……………hott